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Grandpa and Clara
Author: dale10
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(Added on Mar 16, 2011)
(This month 4 readers) (Total 3529 readers) |
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Grandpa has needs, so he uses his granddaughter Clara. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
doctavian
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Apr 2, 2011 |
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"Grand-Pa and Clara" is the heartwarming story of a Grandfather who goes the extra mile to provide his "beloved" granddaughter Clara, with the adult male "quality time" that she so desperately needs, after her father's death. Gerhard's willingness to even go to Clara's school, to be be certain that she is following his instructions is a moving scene.
And his teaching Clara to publicly "happy up" rather than mope around projecting a broken submissive persona is also touching. This is a lesson which very well may double her future profitability, when she becomes a professional and assumes the responsibility of becoming the primary "bread winner" for the family.
The story ends with Grand-Pa's "gift of love " decision to buy a giant dog for Clara, a pet destined to not only be a companion for her, but which also has the potential of becoming her ticket to a profitable career in the "entertainment industry."
PS The unanswered question is: Will Clara someday present her grandfather with her own daughter to love and raise?
Our author "Dale 10," knows that parts of ALL of our human sexuality originates in the "primitive parts of our minds." Many thoughts which our conscious minds try and deny and reject. The fact that over a half million readers "checked this story out" shows that the site's participants have a strong desires to learn more about their "primitive urges." Another interesting fact is that repeated scientific studies have shown that, so many people read stories such as this one, don't increase but "DECREASE" males and females from acting out the urges that Gerhard does act out. And for that we all owe Dale a "thank you" and "a job well done." (10/10)
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Michael247
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Mar 22, 2011 |
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dale10's latest story "Grandpa and Clara" was a great next step for the author. I really enjoyed the overall denigration of Clara and the viciousness of "Grandpa" was just delicious.
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From a plot perspective, like most dale10 stories, this one held together rather well. It was told in first person and was the personal narrative of "Grandpa", who has been abusing his granddaughter Clara. The plot, which moves the reader through the initial subjugation, with recollected rape and plenty of steadily increasing sadism, makes for plenty of sexual tension.
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Once again however we stumble into some grammatical problems, not to mention some basic errors. Take for example the very first sentence. "As soon as my daughter Clara leaves the house, I fuck the shit out of my granddaughter." Ooops. Is Grandpa's daughter and granddaughter both named Clara? We also have the author switching from past tense to present tense at one point, and even slipping out of first person into third. It makes the narrative... difficult.
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I wasn't so enthusiastic about the scatology but the codes warned me so no complaint there. Grandpa is just one sick fuck. I especially wished we could have gotten more of that whipping, or maybe some public humiliation beyond the quick recounting. In fact, my fellow reviewer Thanos makes a fantastic point. More details of the torments Grandpa inflicted would have been nice. Grandpa's commentary was almost like an outline of the perfect story.
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In summary I think that "Grandpa and Clara" is a great step in the right direction for dale10 and I look forward to reading more of his work!
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (7/10)
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Thanos
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Mar 20, 2011 |
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It lacks a little more delay on the details of particular moments with the granddaughter. (7/10)
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DeGrinch
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Mar 18, 2011 |
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Not bad at all. A beginning, middle passage and end that all hold together. I loved the evil old bastard main chacter and wonder if I've ever met him, I think possiblely I have. (8/10)
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