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When Daddy comes home
Author: shona wood
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(Added on Apr 27, 2010)
(This month 50280 readers) (Total 59435 readers) |
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two young subs in a daddy daughter relation with a dom..exsploration |
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Average (?):  (3.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (3/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
sexylady
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May 1, 2010 |
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shona,
As i read your story, i could see that your story was a good one. However, the grammar/spelling takes away from the beauty of your writing. =)
I do hope to read more of your writing, and that you may find someone/or a computer program to help with the editing. So that the true beauty of your writing may be seen by all.
hugs (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Apr 29, 2010 |
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You lost me with "barley little time." I presume you meant, "barely," as "barley" is a grain. Unless you were trying to describe brewing a small amount of beer? (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Apr 29, 2010 |
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Okay, so I know that Shona Wood is dislexic, but there's limits to my understanding.
The storyline of "When Daddy Comes Home" is okay, but this time (besides the spelling mistakes) most of the punctuation marks went MIA, which makes reading the text a rather neck-breaking affair.
Shona told me last time, she was going to send her stories to an aditor, but if "When Daddy Comes Home" has been edited by someone, I would consider killing her/him...
Going for a fiver, just for the effort and for a decent storyline.
JJ (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Apr 28, 2010 |
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I only got to the point where it is the end of the week for the two girls. I had to give up reading this story because I could not make any sense of it because of the numerous spelling mistakes and extremely poor grammar. (1/10)
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