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Virtual Slavery
Author: w.l. telford
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(Added on Feb 14, 2010)
(This month 61264 readers) (Total 80871 readers) |
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A variation on Beauty and the Beast in which the Internet becomes the means by which a wealthy Beast captures another man's Beauty. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
gigiatexaslady
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Jan 11, 2012 |
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I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Coming to the realization of ones self is always cathartic if somewhat painful at times. A great story as yours always are. Always stirs hidden desires. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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May 14, 2010 |
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w.l. telford seems to be one of those skilled authors who go out of their way to upholster their stories. As a result, we don't get a pornfest with sidenotes, but a thorough look at some people's lives with a focus on their sexual escapades.
The latter are the more agreeable reads --at least to yours truly-- because of the added realism when painting a broader picture.
Very well done.
w.l. telford has my full attention from now on...
JJ (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rook
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Mar 19, 2010 |
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Excellent story. While the formatting here is not good (not the author's fault), like Surtea, I read it at another location where the format is better.
The story is hot, the characters are great, the plot is great and the detail are great. Telford did a excellent job in meshing the 3 narratives together to keep a good balance. Am looking forward for the continuation of the story and new stories he will write. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
wltedford
(Edit) (Mar 19, 2010)
- Thank you, Rook and all the others who have taken the time to read and review this story.
I advise anyone interested in reading it to do so at understories.com where it is properly formatted.
WLT
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sedmwif
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Mar 19, 2010 |
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Outstanding!
One only wonders if the writer has other stories to post soon. (10/10)
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Surtea
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Mar 17, 2010 |
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Brilliant story. I have just reread it in another place where the formatting isn't utterly stuffed up. It achieves the difficult of being both a story in its own right and pretty hot as erotica. Congratulations! (9/10)
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rayca
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Mar 7, 2010 |
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I can't read your story it hurts my eyes. You need to put paragragps and spacing. Fix the format. I use a mac try to resubmitted as a wep page. .....I really want to read it... (3/10)
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- Replied by:
wltedford
(Edit) (Mar 15, 2010)
- To read this story properly formatted go to understories.com.
I have made several efforts to correct the problem here and do not understand why it has not been corrected.
WLT
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DeGrinch
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Mar 2, 2010 |
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This is a fine story, with very good character development, and story line, and great sex. I would rate it 2 points higher except for its complete lack of paragraphs, which make it hard to read. I've looked at the revised version and this problem is still there, can't see why it was revised without this main problem being fixed. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
wltedford
(Edit) (Mar 2, 2010)
- I agree completely with the comments about formatting, which continues to be lost in the BDSM Library upload.
I write on Apple computers using Pages. Originally I exported and submitted the story as a Word doc.
When it first appeared with the formatting lost, I subsequently resubmitted it in three additional formats: RTF, txt, and PDF.
I don't know which of these the webmaster used on this second attempt, but obviously it didn't work, and I wish he would try again and look at the results before posting, and/or email me with a suggestion as to how to solve this problem, which I have not encountered elsewhere.
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ReVampt_pet
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Feb 23, 2010 |
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Kudos to the Author! This kept me On for several hours!
I how you wrapped things up in the end. (9/10)
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kemosabe
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Feb 22, 2010 |
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Please don't be detered from the length of this story and lack of formatting. You will be richly rewarded by one of the best story-tellers I've ever read. A super-super effort from one of the best! Now, if I could only meet Sara5 (10/10)
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castle2001
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Feb 21, 2010 |
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Excellent story and characters. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
castle2001
(Edit) (Feb 23, 2010)
- Can't wait for Winston to join the party. Winston as in 1984?
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janmayen
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Feb 20, 2010 |
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I like the whole story. The part I liked best was Lynn being put out to ho in the street :-)
I hope there will be a sequel. (10/10)
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Sara5
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Feb 16, 2010 |
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Ohhh what a fantastic story. It has a severe shortage of paragraphs, but even so i just read it from begining to end and it's now gone 2 in the morning.
Such finely created characters that developed so well.
All i can say is i soooo wish i could be Lynn. I loved it, thank You. (9/10)
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