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Our Fifth Day Together
Author: Kristina
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(Added on Feb 11, 2009)
(This month 59291 readers) (Total 63994 readers) |
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DO NOT LET THE GRAMMER ERRORS GET IN YOUR WAY. I write how i fantasize and who fantasizes gramatically correct. One night for a new sub and her new Master. He has been working very hard to \"break\" her in. (my first shot at documenting the things i touch myself to)This story includes anal, hard oral, toys, bondage, etc. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 20, 2009 |
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Since there was a slight misunderstanding between the author and myself, I promised to clarify that my little rant regarding correct grammar wasn't pointed at Kristina, but rather at the first words of the synopsys. I also had a re-read and added a point to the rating.
(Feb 14, 2009)
On the one hand, I'm almost never one to go apeshit over spelling and/or grammatical errors.
On the other hand, however, I find it seriously lacking in respect towards the trade to hide behind this or that excuse, to not having to go through the effort of writing without faults.
Because, like it or not, when you want to be a writer, writing without errors is one of the basics.
I mean, as a writer, saying that spelling and grammar aren't that important, is like stating that a Formula One racedriver doesn't need to know how to drive.
If you want to fantasize stuff without having to watch your spelling and stuff, make movies. And find someone who can write to chop down the screenplay.
Okay, to the story now.
I can be brief about that. It's okay. Well written and nicely paced. Although a tad cliché in the setting of the scene.
And I'm wondering what happened to the first four days.
JJ (8/10)
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toy_k
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Feb 15, 2009 |
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I doubt you will ever come back to read this. Thank you for reviewing my story, I think. I am disturbed by your comments because they indicate that you think that I do not have the ability to write grammatically correct, which is not the case. I actually pride myself in my ability to write papers academically. As you probably know, I would never give this to a college professor. I never said that writing without errors is not important, but I wrote this story for a website, not a dissertation, or for publication. << This response goes diractly towards: "...I find it seriously lacking in respect towards the trade to hide behind this or that excuse..." I think the way I wrote the story gives it a certain flow as well as voice. I did not write this story to launch my career in literature. The errors in this paper were not spelling or missing commas, or grammar of this nature. They were sentence structure errors; these mainly being incomplete sentences, which help with the flow I wanted the story to have. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Feb 20, 2009)
- As explained through PM, my little fall-out wasn't aimed at the story nor at you, but rather at what was included in the synopsys.
Sorry I've upset you. Wasn't meant to.
JJ
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