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In Her Service
Author: azsub1
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(Added on Feb 1, 2009)
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A submissive crossdresser finds one to serve and gets more than he bargained for. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mousetodress
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May 9, 2010 |
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Dear azsub1,the story was so good I had to read it in several days, just because you made me so hot with your writing. Great characters and action with a believable plot, the right amount of psychology (I truly love when you makes them "think" about the events...).
On the downside, the format of your story gave me troubles to save it on my personnal file (I had to re-work on the format, it was a bit boring to say the least, but what a reward after...).
So what about a continuation of this story?
If I may express hopes, chastity 24/7 (whith her teasing him constantly and denying him every week, every month, every trimester and then...), exposing him outside her house at her "new" club and his work there as a maid, his progressive loss of his own identity & his total satisfaction as he goes deeper and deeper in submission. And last but not least, his sexual submission to other men (this should be a short part, but truly intense humiliation, of the story). Of course limits stated between them in the beginning fade as one goes along.
If anyone has other ideas, he/she should submit you new ideas to enrich an already exceptionnal story (and I've read a lot on this site).
I don't know if you will offer a follow-up on "In Her Service", but if yes, just keep up with the good work.
Please, please, please continue... Wish you the best!!
(10/10)
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Feb 12, 2009 |
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Over all the story is pretty good, probably better than what I rated it. What knocked the rating down is the very poor format. Individual lines. No paragraphs. I was intrigued enough to actually copy the 5 chapters into word, deleting all those lines, combining them into paragraphs that make sense, etc. Furthermore the lack of proof reading (lots of mistakes)is in a way a form of disrespecting your readers. It says to me, that you really don't care about the quality of your writing. Nevertheless, I hope that you will continue the story, maybe taking some of my comments to heart and improve on them. It certainly will gain you a better rating from me, but then again, you may not care. (6/10)
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maid babu
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Feb 4, 2009 |
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Great story!! Looks familiar (fictionmania?); i love to see the continuation of the story even beyond that has already been published.
I like it because it is quite similar to what i have experienced personally. sp, please continue.... (10/10)
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- Replied by:
lovetoxdress {Mtoltox}
(Edit) (Feb 8, 2009)
- I liked the story. Left me wondering why sHE didn't masturbate maybe sHE needs a chasity device? I like pirecings sense I have so many and there is so much you can do with a PA. Shaving and forced cross dress were done great. Over all... I enjoyed it ... keep it up
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