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The Breaking and Making of Marianne
Author: Rum Bos'n
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(Added on Aug 7, 2008)
(This month 116824 readers) (Total 192680 readers) |
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Whilst her husband is away at sea, Marianne is abducted, and begins to learn there can be pleasure in pain. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 4, 2009 |
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Dunno what the other reviewers saw in this, but I found this story to be of average quality.
Again, as in so many cases, the writer is way too eager to depict the victim as a willing participant in her own degradation, which, again, leads to the 'victim' rather enjoying pretty quick what is being done to her. Bollocks.
The reason for her abduction is also very, very thin. If feeling jealous or being looked down upon is a good reason to kidnap folks, everybody's basement should bulge with abductees.
Dialogues are way to crude for such, reportedly, sophisticated people.
The summing-up of what might eventually be done to Marianne, is ludicrous and again shows the eagerness of the writer to bluntly confront us with his idea of erotiscism.
Okay, so now for the positive.
As a first story, this is okay. The writer obviously knows how to come up with a decent sentence (although I still have to encounter my first pair of "horny hands", or am wondering how you can attach ropes to pulleys at the roof when you're in a basement).
Lots of room for improvement here, but still a fairly decent first installment.
JJ (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
peter7
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Nov 19, 2008 |
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It is difficult to add to previous reviews of this very promising story.It was gripping and interesting as we follow the perils of Marianne and the plot develops. We fear for her purity and wait to see what fate awaits her, we share in the knowledge and detailed description of her anticipated corruption, and cannot wait for the future twists and turns of her erotic adventures. Nicely written and enjoyable with flair for a great story from an old sailor (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mindmagic454803
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Nov 10, 2008 |
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An excellent story of the abduction of Marianne. It is a 3rd person narrative, but we readers are basically looking over Marianne's shoulder and so we know only what she knows. The mystery quality is very good. There was already the giving away of the villain, but who knows? Perhaps, she is acting on someone else's behalf? An erotic and fun story. I look forward to the next chapter. (9/10)
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sotx66
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Aug 13, 2008 |
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Wonderful first story.
The plot needs clarification which I hope will come in future chapters but descriptions are great!
(8/10)
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