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Humiliated and enslaved
Author: Rigel
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(Added on May 14, 2008)
(This month 27634 readers) (Total 57207 readers) |
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School teacher caught in a compromising situation ends up becoming a slave to your brother-in-law |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 2, 2012 |
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Having to work hard to keep the pounds off and as a result having "very large breasts" is a contradiction, since working out does away with fat tissue; of which a female breast has about 75%...
The synopsys also tells me my bro-in-law has your main character as a slave. A fact my sister won't appreciate much.
In short, there's umpteen errors and mistakes which made my skin crawl constantly while reading "Humiliated And Enslaved".
I thus have to agree with Escritor, in that the reading could have been better should a proofread have taken place.
Wouldn't have helped the story though. The latter is too uninspired for that.
JJ (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Escritor
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Jan 22, 2009 |
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This is a good story, but could be much better. You should proofread what you write and edit some more. Several spelling and grammar errors are repeated all over the place:
Be is used instead of Me
Like instead of Lick
Reflect instead of Reflex
and some more. (6/10)
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slut2002gyrl
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Jul 12, 2008 |
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mmmmmmmmmm, so juiced and just getting to the good part for gyrl! she tried to email you, but the address did not work. please keep writing! (9/10)
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Velma
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May 19, 2008 |
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i was soaked by the time i was done. excellent. cant wait for the rest:) (9/10)
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fettered
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May 15, 2008 |
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Nice story - Looking forward to more. :) (9/10)
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mkemse
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May 15, 2008 |
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great start, well writen and ertailed i hope you do not wait 6 month to continue the story (9/10)
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