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Taken
Author: Ruth Harper
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(Added on May 13, 2007)
(This month 50926 readers) (Total 66798 readers) |
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A girl is taken into a van and turned into a living sex toy. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Arcege
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May 23, 2007 |
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Nice. Interesting use of second-person, which as others have said, is very difficult. Good use of perception at times with that 2nd person as well. I look forward to the next installment. (7/10)
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Mad Lews
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May 15, 2007 |
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Sounds a bit like one of Robert's excellent graphic novels but that's all to the good. Have to agree with the wise owl. Second person narrator is a tough sell best used in tightly constructed very short stories. Aside from pronoun abuse it limits your point of view. Third person (omnipotent) is easiest to tell and read. Even first person would have worked better but that comes with its own limits. (7/10)
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chksng19
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May 14, 2007 |
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Ms Harper, one of the most difficult forms of writing is to write in the "second-person". 'You this, and you that' and all the you's tend to get hard to follow and make the story tough to tell. You do it ok, but it does get in the way of the storytelling.
Otherwise, I think it's a good start. Looking forward to more! (6/10)
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sirbor
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May 14, 2007 |
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That was a great start, I hope that you continue this tale. I want to see what your devious mind comes up with next. (8/10)
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steve2334
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May 13, 2007 |
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i liked your story but would have liked it from the captive side instead (5/10)
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