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Bijoux, The Pony Girl
Author: Missy Crystal
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(Added on Sep 4, 2006)
(This month 18366 readers) (Total 37512 readers) |
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Billy Joe is kidnapped, transformed into Bijoux and trained to become the newest addition to Mistress Margo\'s stable of pony girls |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
sillypony
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Jan 2, 2008 |
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It is a great idea- creative, lots of detail.
However, you need to reread it a few times (try doing this allowed, or one sentence at a time from the end) for grammar. There are a lot of run-ons and the character's personal feelings runs into the narration and events. Also, some events- like the first time Bijoux receives a but plug- are flat, and could use so much more detail, and information about how it feels for him. It is a great start though! Keep up the good work (4/10)
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abitbent
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Sep 5, 2006 |
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The story had me so subtly entrapped, that if there were any spelling or grammar mistakes, i didn't see them! Anxiously awaiting more chapters! (9/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Sep 5, 2006 |
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Very good beginning and excellent plot. I hope it develops into a great story. (8/10)
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Mistress M
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Sep 5, 2006 |
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Nice surprise at the beginning. The story is well written through out. It has a lot of familiar ponygirl threads, but the main gist of the story is unusual. (9/10)
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Tasha
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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Love this story. Very good development of the plot. Pretty damned arousing too.
Hope there are many more parts to come.
Tasha (10/10)
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TheDevilsPlaymate
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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The conscept of the story was totally awesome. I could imagine it taking place when i closed my eyes. Its very well written and hope more chapters are to follow. (10/10)
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