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Escape from hell
Author: JIP
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(Added on Mar 23, 2006)
(This month 51947 readers) (Total 71328 readers) |
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Lisa is kidnapped. The guy is particular bad as for some reason he hates women. A few hours torture are enough for Lisa to prefer an immediate death... |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dusty Spring
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Feb 5, 2010 |
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Somebody ought to teach him/her how to write, spell or hit the spell-right key. (3/10)
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Gordi
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Feb 22, 2008 |
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For as long as the story is, there isn't much to wank to. And the grammar is distracting. I know it's a free story and all, but... (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Nov 28, 2006 |
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Not a review but a mathematical correction of a mad quote of a banned member bondage man69, who quoted nearly to everybody 1! (10/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Mar 24, 2006 |
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Not very good writing the plot was rushed and under developed. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
kimmi
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Mar 24, 2006 |
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Sorry...just doesn't do it. Poor writing, predictable story, no real drive to your writing. (2/10)
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Sklaventreiber
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Mar 24, 2006 |
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more could have been done to improve grammer... (3/10)
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- Replied by:
jip
(Edit) (Apr 1, 2006)
- It is grammar and not grammer
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Mar 23, 2006 |
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This story has a decent theme to it, but your writing skills are very limited. I think English must not be your native language. That being said, perhaps you could find an editor over in the forums to help you out. You have numerous typos and the flow of the story is just off. (2/10)
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H Dean
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Mar 23, 2006 |
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Halting sentences, poor understanding of punctuation and a lack of flow mark this story. This made it very difficult to stay with the story. It's pretty clear that this Author is not writing in their native tongue. Having said that, I will say that this is a solid effort that only needs a proper edit. Really, it was the lack of flow that killed this story for me - not the story itself. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Mar 23, 2006 |
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nice job, a bit crewsome with her tits being nailed but the sotry was not bad (8/10)
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- Replied by:
bondage_man69
(Edit) (Apr 27, 2006)
- ever hear of spell check????
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