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Weighed
Average (?): (9/10) |
Average
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Highest
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Lowest
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Reviewer:
JimmyJump
(Edit) |
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Jan 27, 2009 |
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Okay, what we have here, is a fairly interesting story distilled out of a very good idea, but sadly, handled rather poorly. For instance, and we see this too often in many a movie, you never ever taste cocaine. Pure, you'll taste nothing, cuz cocaine is tasteless. Cut, you'll only taste the product(s) with which the cocaine was cut (like sugar or flower), but the main reason why you do not ever taste it, is because you never know with what the cocaine has been cut. It could be poison, for all you know. Secondly, there's a couple of paragraphs where the word "her" and/or "she" is used in the same sentence to refer to more than one person, so that you don't know which person is meant. Thirdly, there's not enough dialogue. The first spanking of the story is a rather mental affair, as no feelings are expressed. The descriptions of what's going on are okay, but nothing is being said, which makes everything a tad awkward and leaves the reader confused. There's way too many spelling mistakes to be healthy. As an example, the words "wells" and "wealds" are used when it should be "welts". I could go on for a while, but I guess you get the picture. This doesn't mean that the story is 'bad'. Not at all. It just means that with a little more work put-in, this could have been a far better effort than it is now. JJ (7/10)
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Reviewer:
tiffany love
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Mar 19, 2006 |
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Absolutely amaising! Erotic to the last letter! (10/10)
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Reviewer:
tom03087
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Mar 1, 2006 |
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well written (10/10)
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Reviewer:
chksng19
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Mar 1, 2006 |
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very well told story, a pleasure to read. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
La Toya
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Mar 1, 2006 |
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Great job writing the story! The way you end it, makes we want to keep an eye out for more punishment for the two. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
buellfool
(Edit) |
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Mar 1, 2006 |
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Great story,I love when women punish each other.I was hoping for a pussy whipping,still I am pleased to have read your story,thank you . (10/10)
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Reviewer:
jip
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Mar 1, 2006 |
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Excellent punishment story. Explicit sexual details. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 28, 2006 |
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good and intresting, nice job ob the sotr,y something a bit different (8/10)
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