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The refusal
Author: rapelover
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(Added on Jan 12, 2006)
(This month 64947 readers) (Total 96191 readers) |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Jan 12, 2007 |
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My primary complaint is that rather than posting individual chapters, each update includes everything that was previously posted. Try posting ONLY the new chapter, and not re-posting the entire story each time. It's very difficult to figure out where the new stuff begins. (5/10)
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25toLife
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Jan 12, 2007 |
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How would you like to read through 1000 lines in a single paragraph? It's gets confusing after the 20th line. (5/10)
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chksng19
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Sep 17, 2006 |
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A story with much promise, rapelover. I think a little learning about English formatting, sentence structure, and idiom usage would do wonders. (6/10)
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cala
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Sep 16, 2006 |
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Please, learn how to format text so your story can be comfortably read on a screen. (4/10)
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woolfighter
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Sep 16, 2006 |
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The story is perfect. The way you tell it could be improved, but PLEASE, go on writing (8/10)
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Millie
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Aug 4, 2006 |
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I would really like to read this but the format is too difficult. Each time a new person speaks there should be a new line of text. If you alter it I will have another go. (5/10)
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jip
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Feb 2, 2006 |
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bof, have read much better as this story. (4/10)
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Blue_Monday
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Jan 21, 2006 |
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I'm going to have very sweet dreams tonight.... Clearly you've thought a lot about humiliation and have some good ideas for carrying it out. Your dialogue was good, too, especially in the very beginning--it was just gritty enough to ring true. But what happened in the end?--it was like reading an outline of a story.
I'd really like to read it again, or read another installment, written out fully, with paragraphs and dialogue formatted a little better. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Jan 20, 2006 |
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a couple paragraphs were way to long (6/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 16, 2006 |
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the one problem i had withthe story is the paragraphs are way to long, the storyitself was ok (6/10)
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