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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
glib24
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Jun 16, 2012 |
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An enjoyable journey of self discovery, with only a few writing problems (what happened to verifying his ID?).
Also, a couple of squicky bits mentioned or described in passing, but nothing graphic in that category for me. (6/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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good reading (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Deanna
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Oct 12, 2006 |
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Bad ending, poorly written. Sorry. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 18, 2006)
- Once again, "poorly written" does absolutely nothing to explain to me WHY you think it's poorly written. As for the ending, if you didn't like it, tough shit.
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| Reviewer:
gcevans
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Nov 26, 2005 |
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I have to say that I did not expect to enjoy this story much since the setting did not apeal but since I have enjoyed all of your stories I read this one and was pleasently supriesed. I though that it worked very well. I think that the way that the ending was done was quite different then the normal endings set in the military. It would be great to hear more of her adventures now that she has moved to being a full time slave. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2005)
- Thank you for your comments. I wasn't all that pleased with this particular story myself, particularly what I considered a rather predictable ending. I was getting bored with it, but still wanted to post it in the hopes that someone would like it.
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gcevans
(Edit) (Nov 28, 2005)
- WHat I liked about the ending was that I was not the squad taking revenge. That is how these things seem to go and that is not very interesting to me. The thing that I like that you often seem to capture well is the fantasy that these women are forced or drawn into a submissive life that they suprisingly find exciting. That is not that they like eveything but that they feal they belong as slaves. That and that the men in the story also handle this as natural and resonable. In any case for me the conclusion worked from a pure turn on perspective. This was certinly not a deap story but that is not aways a bad thing for erotica.
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| Reviewer:
longrover
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Oct 15, 2005 |
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I liked your character. Her problem was real and she found a solution she liked. The end was believable. (8/10)
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Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 16, 2005)
- I don't know how believable it really was, but what the hell...it was a fantasy I'd been carrying for a lot of years, you know?
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Oct 2, 2005 |
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I found parts to be close to real life. As I did find one of my part time slaves via public transit(the airport). The story was very well done. I think the hotel part with her troops could have been expanded (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2005)
- There's a reason for the reality. In most cases, I've been to the places I wrote about. Based on the feedback I've received, I'll think about doing a re-write when time permits. Thanks for the comments...constructive criticism is always appreciated.
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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Well thought out story. i can relate to what the author described. Very good story. (7/10)
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Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- Just feel fortunate that I didn't decide to go into detail about the daily monotony of work on a special weapons storage site! "Her soldiers watched the grass grow...she watched her soldiers watch the grass grow...then the shift ended. In 24 hours, it would begin all over again." Needless to say, there was plenty of time for those assigned to places such as this to fantasize about nearly everything.
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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The story was going very well until the end. It was sooooo cliche to have the men she commanded use her. How disappointing! (5/10)
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Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- Sorry for the chiche'-type ending...but I couldn't figure out another way to do it. I am glad you enjoyed the beginning, though.
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| Reviewer:
slutsteph
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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It was a good beginning, but ended much to soon and too quickly. (6/10)
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Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- I must have become anxious to get it done; I actually thought it was a little too long. Glad you enjoyed the beginning, though.
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| Reviewer:
tiffany love
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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There was nothing erotic only empty talk. You need to put more erotic action (descriptions). And make it a little bit realistic (2/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- I thought I'd try something a bit different. Apparently, without much success.
- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- You story WAS successful and you can't please everyone. I liked it other than the sucky ending. Don't give up writing!!!
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Rocky
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- Thanks. Although I whipped the story out in a few hours, the fantasy itself has been there for many, many years...ever since I worked at one of those damnable sites.
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