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Kidnapped Debutante
Author: R.B. Thibo
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(Added on Oct 1, 2005)
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A sixteen year old girl becomes a play thing for a mother and son. |
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| Reviewer:
csr
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Oct 3, 2005 |
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In your foreword/disclaimer you warn us that your spelling and grammar are bad. Many people would be more than happy to give your story a once-over before you upload it. Post in the forums for an editor and you'll be surprised at how easily you will find a little help. (5/10)
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chksng19
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Oct 3, 2005 |
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An old plot (with a twist at the end) not treated well. You give up too much of the plot at the beginning, and much of the rest is just a reprise of what already happened. Hordes of spelling and word-use errors are terribly distracting.
I think you could do better. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Oct 2, 2005 |
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i simply did not find it enjoyable, to much, seems like it was written by a very young person with some of the language other may enjoy it, but i certainly did not find it hot or erotic, sorry (5/10)
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