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At Daddy's Mercy
Author: Cecilita
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(Added on Aug 13, 2005)
(This month 102124 readers) (Total 195045 readers) |
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Diane, a Danish Girl, "lightly" retarded and under her Fathers will are trained to perform at his beck and call. Story is verbally told to also submissive friends and documented. Publishing here permitted by Diane. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
archetype
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Jul 4, 2007 |
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Very hot story, and the characters are engaging.
Looking forward to the rest.
(9/10)
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jip
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Feb 6, 2006 |
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The story is erotic. Although the "incest" of the father person, at least he seems to love the girl. Jens is simply a bad caracter. The description of feelings are well written. (8/10)
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Foxysake
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Feb 4, 2006 |
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promising plotline. sad and distrubing, but it's good, hope you update soon (7/10)
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WildCat
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Dec 4, 2005 |
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Can't wait for more (7/10)
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LordVetinari
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Aug 21, 2005 |
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Very disturbing, but also highly erotic. (8/10)
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slo18
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Aug 16, 2005 |
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good story (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
redEva
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Aug 14, 2005 |
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I have to agree with mkemse about the disabled person, I personally do not like that part. Other than that point, it would help if you could have someone proofread it before you have it posted.
But, I loved the story, it is nice, well told and has promise - please do continue :)
(6/10)
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- Replied by:
Cecilita
(Edit) (Aug 15, 2005)
- Dear RedEva!
Thank You for Your kindly feedback!
I’m afraid You are right. So right!
That was a bad translation mistake in choice of word, I could sadly see that now.
The original Diane is slow in the common meaning of “a dumb blonde woman”. “Lightly” should perhaps be “slightly” retarded or should I say naïve, short thinking or what ever. I believe she has a low number of IQ but sky-high EQ. She is dumb but not disable.
She is very verbal and can easily express her feelings and impressions.
In a discussion You could detect her being at a different abstraction level as in a distraction. She is there but not all the time (if You follow my meaning).
She is very lovable.
I have NO intension to insult disable people, and I felt that You understood that.
As you know we all have to handle our World and environment with the body and mind we’ve got. Life is´nt fear.
There is little we could do to increase our intelligence and mind gifts.
The only thing is to handle the fact and (as we all do) make the best of it.
I have translated and mailed part 2 as well, with the same error.
Perhaps You can please give me a hint of what to do to correct my blunder?
I´m sorry to say I have no one to proofread it.
Yours
Cecilita
- Replied by:
redEva
(Edit) (Aug 15, 2005)
- Cecilita,
I have not been offended, nor do I think that your story, even as it is now, is offensive to any mentally disabled person! Yeah, life is not fair and they (mentally disabled people) are even easier and more likely to become target of abuse like this in real life.
My only comment was regarding my personal preference, and while it is much easier to manipulate retarded child into the position like that, in my mind it is not a challenge, nor as much enjoyment as to do it to the fully functional person.
After your explanation here, I see what you meant, unfortunately, at this point in time, I can not … come up with appropriate “wording”, the better suited description of the person that you are looking for. Maybe someone else can help us out!?
Simple - maybe.
I would offer to proofread, but unfortunately English is not my first language either - so I would not be much help to you.
Post on the forums and ask for help - there usually are well minded people with some spare times who would not mind helping you.
As I said, I like the story, the premise and the predicament the girl finds herself in.
Looking forward reading more.
Thanks,
red
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mkemse
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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the story wasok, i wish you had not choosen a retarded as you put it girl, would have made the story more enjoyable, for people disbabled this wasa bad choice to me of they type of victim to use (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Cecilita
(Edit) (Aug 15, 2005)
- Dear Mkemse!
Thank You Sir for Your kindly feedback!
I’m afraid You are right, Sir. So right!
That was a bad translation mistake in choice of word, I could see that now.
The original Diane is slow in the common meaning of “a dumb blonde woman”. “Lightly” should perhaps be “slightly” retarded or should I say naïve, short thinking or what ever. I believe she has a low number of IQ but sky-high EQ. She is dumb but not disable.
She is very verbal and can easily express her feelings and impressions.
In a discussion You could detect her being at a different abstraction level as in a distraction. She is there but not all the time (if You follow my meaning).
She is very lovable.
I have NO intension to insult disable people, and I felt that You understood that.
As you know we all have to handle our World and environment with the body and mind we’ve got. Life is´nt fear.
There is little we could do to increase our intelligence and mind gifts.
The only thing is to handle the fact and (as we all do) make the best of it.
I have translated and mailed part 2 as well, with the same error.
Perhaps You can please give me a hint of what to do to correct my blunder?
Yours
Cecilita
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