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    Farm Slaves
    
    Author: Pallidan
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    (Added on Jun 3, 2005)
            (This month 58375 readers) (Total 77549 readers) | 
   
   
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    Vacationing couple and friend end up strandled on Ma and Pa Farm.  Their lives will be changed forever. | 
   
 
 
   
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    | Reviewer: 
    rebelfan1
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    Aug 4, 2005 | 
   
   
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        Pallidan continues to post the same plot over and over again.  His/her writing and gramatical skills are below a grammer school level.  Please learn how to write or find someone to edit your stories.  Otherwise, stop posting them because there actually get in the way of searching for good stories. (1/10) 
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    | Reviewer: 
    Mad Lews
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    Jun 10, 2005 | 
   
   
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        Some good story ideas but you need to work on your story telling skills. write and rewrite, read it aloud and have others proof read. You'll get better (5/10) 
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    Ruby
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    Jun 7, 2005 | 
   
   
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        Needs a bit of editing work, but it also missing the emotion, the feelings that go with a good story.  What is our story teller feeling when he sees these things happen?  What's happening to his senses?  The last section is great example of something that could have been "milked" into a hot scene, but left me a bit dry. (5/10) 
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    bdsmbill
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    Jun 6, 2005 | 
   
   
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        You have some ideas, although they are nothing new.  Your language skill are so bad, however, that you just can't get your ideas on the paper in a readable form. (2/10) 
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    Rocky
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    Jun 5, 2005 | 
   
   
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        Pathetic.  Again, I suggest you go return to the fifth grade and take an English class so you'll learn to develop skills in sentence structure and punctuation.   (2/10) 
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