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False Pregnancy
Author: Michelle Byssom
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(Added on Mar 19, 2005)
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A moment in the life of Sally as she falls into the pit of degradation and humiliation made to serve as an extreme prostitute by a hard Mistress. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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pharma
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Jun 30, 2016 |
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Good story, in general it can be a bit larger, describing all the stuff in more details, and the suffering process for colored. But it was easy to read, and the author has a good fantasy. Thanks! (8/10)
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sulkon
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Jun 4, 2012 |
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Somewhat brief indeed, but very good nonetheless. Excellent ideas for particular scenes as well as for the whole plot (which, however, could use a bit more development, even if it being a glimpse was the founding idea). (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jun 16, 2010 |
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A bit of a letdown, this one. Miss Byssom can reply what she wants (to longrover below), "False Pregnancy" still reads and feels as an overly rushed essay; as if what's been presented was a preliminary text which the author would use as a leitmotive for the real story.
Too bad, as "False Pregnancy" could have been so much more than what it is now.
JJ (7/10)
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Avralivia
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Jul 13, 2006 |
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very good - but tbh i didnt enjoy it - even though i love lactation stories that kind of thing - i even like some tirture stories, maybe its because im a mum - i dont know but it made me feel quite disturbed, ahh well. (8/10)
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Mothbrad
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Dec 22, 2005 |
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Really enjoyable and erotic story that covered one of my favourite fantasies. I would love to hear more about what actually happens to Sally, rather than it being left to my imagination. (8/10)
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MaitreDamien
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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Good was worth reading. Nothing much to say. curiosity maybe. (7/10)
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longrover
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Mar 26, 2005 |
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A good story, with your usual excellent plot and protagonist. I like the fact you glide quickly past the primary encounters in your stories. In this case, the opening scenes at Madame's house was gruesome enough. Shudder.
Unfortunately, I was distracted by little things. The days of the week began with small letters. Mixed up colons and semicolons. Sentences spliced with semicolons rather than commas, but run on just the same. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Mar 26, 2005)
- Thank you, longrover. One of my metrics is the speed with which one can meaningfully enough 'cut to the chase.' The balance is always a delicate one, and I thank your appreciation of that.
As for orthography and punctuation - we have in English been steadily getting rid of capitalisations of nouns for the past 200 years or so, and so my usage is part of that process (see -the original- of any 19th century writing to appreciate the kind of change I mean.) And as for within sentence punctuation - as you may appreciate, the basic unit of emotion is the paragraph; sentences are adjuncts to this: and the comma, the semicolon and the colon are devices to indicate to the reader how a sentence should be read. I note you do not berate me for not capitalising after a colon as some copy writers would have me do - so obviously there is some scope for argument here!
Perhaps my style is not what one would expect from a porn story. If so, I apologise. However, I would expect a reviewer to try and understand my idiosyncracies as communicative devices. If it reads, and you understand, then my objective has been achieved.
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mr addams
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Mar 26, 2005 |
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a wonderfull build up, very involved, but the whole thing with the client? a bit more than 2 lines would have been nice (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Mar 26, 2005)
- Dear Mr Addams - thank you for your kind comments. I appreciate your understanding of the sense of involvement - this is what a story writer hopes to achieve!
If you count the words -grins- you will see I spend a substantial amount of words on the interaction with the client, but the focus of the story is precisely that the 'client' is in the end irrelevant. The focus is the momentary glimpse of the progress of a woman bound for destruction and the players around her who wittingly or otherwise consign her to this fate.
I think from your comment you do understand this aspect of the story - if you want a detailed blow by blow -ugh!- account then there are other stories on this (excellent) bdsm library site which will satisfy your taste for detail.
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La Toya
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Mar 25, 2005 |
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A very good story. I would lookto know if more will be coming (8/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Mar 23, 2005 |
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Excellent writing style from th author. Plot was excellent. (7/10)
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mkemse
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Mar 20, 2005 |
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waiting to see where you go next (7/10)
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bisarah
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Mar 20, 2005 |
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i think i might have fainted when she had the balloon shoved into her womb!!!! my legs are still crossed ... always a sign of a good story. will there be more? (9/10)
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LordVetinari
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Mar 20, 2005 |
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Someone clearly had way too much free time recently. The author went for the trifecta. What a great story, and my favourite of the three posted this day, which is saying something, as all three were outstanding. I loved it! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Mar 20, 2005)
- Dear Lord Vetinari, and my kind critics Mkemse and Bisarah. The stories were months in the making - the life of a slave girl is not easy [grins]. I would like to think that all my stories reflect the mental life of the 'everywoman' that is within every subbie and slave however she constitutes herself to be.
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Winnie
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Mar 19, 2005 |
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Well worded and liked the compasionate ending (9/10)
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