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Switch for the Summer
Author: Kev
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(Added on Mar 8, 2005)
(This month 63923 readers) (Total 94138 readers) |
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When their mother had to go away for the summer leaving the two sisters in the care of a babysitter Lisa saw her chance to switch places with her older sister. She receives help from her best friend Eve in the humiliation of Thea. Who thought it would be fun playing with dolls again at the age of thirteen? |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Silversea
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Jul 13, 2011 |
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This was a very promising concept- two sisters posing as one another. It is something Ive seen before, and its rare to find it in a bdsm story. The story was decent, but It has some major flaws:
-There was no buildup, or tension. It just goes straight from the intro into the switch. It could have had a more subtle and tantalizing approach- like the younger sister brings up the idea, and the older sister agrees not knowing where it will lead, and is to late to back out.
-The next big flaw is the characters were unbelievable. The scene where the younger sister and her friend transform her in their room, they seem way to mature. Like their dominatrix's in their twenties. It would have been more fun if they really seemed like thirteen olds.
This was a decent story, but could have been much better (5/10)
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krop
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Dec 11, 2010 |
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Very good story. only complaint is it's too short more would be awesome. (9/10)
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sarahbunnyuk
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Jun 8, 2008 |
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A very sexy story, and a totally unique one as well, that has a lot of scenario possibilities to explore, and one that surprised me into getting excited reading it! More please!! (9/10)
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mkemse
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Mar 1, 2006 |
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something a bit different very enjoyable (8/10)
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luka
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Sep 25, 2005 |
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I hope you will continue both stories...this one is pehaps even hotter (just my opinion) ;) (10/10)
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rhmusic
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Sep 24, 2005 |
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Excellent story! It spins a wonderful world where our heroine is willingly drawn to her submission in an almost dreamlike way. Beautiful.
PS: Try "Vulnerable" instead of "Woundable".
PPS: If you want an editor, I'd be happy to help. (9/10)
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emmaadmirer
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Apr 4, 2005 |
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Very interesting story so far :)
I hope there is much more to come *can`t wait for the next chapter* (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Kev
(Edit) (Apr 15, 2005)
- *bows*
Thanks for the rave review. I have begun working on chapter three now so keep the comments comming and Ill keep writing
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2licks4u3
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Mar 25, 2005 |
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pretty well written so far..looking forward to the next adventure (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Kev
(Edit) (Mar 30, 2005)
- Wow, Im already having a fan base :) Thank you kindly for the rating and be sure to check back for the next part, its in the pipeline.
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Mad Lews
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Mar 11, 2005 |
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Very good start and an imaginative story line. Your English is not bad except for verb tenses. You might consider having a friend proofread the next installment before you post it. Actually it's better than some of the things native speakers post. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Kev
(Edit) (Mar 30, 2005)
- Sadly I have no friends... At lest none that could proof read the smut im writing ;)
I think I will write a few more stories before I feel the need to start developing my writing. I want to know if I will continue writing of if its just a passing phase. Thank you for the comment
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Jacen
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Mar 10, 2005 |
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I like it, so far. It's too short, but you know that :) Good potential, so keep going. A few English mistakes, but not bad. I strongly like the ageplay direction this story can take, and hope thats followed up with. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Kev
(Edit) (Mar 30, 2005)
- I thank you for the kind rating and fear not, the secopnd part is already posted and in that you will get some more juicy details.
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ms2bused
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Mar 8, 2005 |
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I did enjoy this story very much and especially the scenario of the older sister being controlled and immensely manipulated byt the two younger girls! I am sure that it will become more sexual in content and, for my pleasure, I can only hope that it might evolve into a 'tease/denial' situation where Eve and Lisa begin requiring sexual satisfaction from Thea while purposely making sure Thea is kept in a constant state of arousal but NEVER allowed to reach an orgasm herself! That would truly be ideal!!! There could be a little correction in the English but it is not to the point of causing disruption in the story! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Kev
(Edit) (Mar 30, 2005)
- Im thinking in those lines of denial myself so stick around for more gritty details.
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ms2bused
(Edit) (Apr 3, 2005)
- Thank you eversomuch for your kind, considerate response! Oh yes, I shall be waiting with bated breathe for all the ensuing chapter to come!
Hugs,
neenee
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Garyminuk
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Mar 8, 2005 |
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Lovely idea, and so well written, both myself and my partner liked it. She felt it had to have been written by a femme, despite the name of the author. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Kev
(Edit) (Mar 30, 2005)
- Thank you kindly. My writing might be concidered feminie because it take ages for me to set the story up. I seem to lack the ability to write shorter more crude stories :)
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