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The Thin Line Between Pleasure And Pain
Author: Peter Allow
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(Added on Mar 4, 2005)
(This month 9551 readers) (Total 24407 readers) |
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William explores the adventure of torturing and beating up her girlfriend Ellie, just the way she had begged him to do. Being hogtied, spanked and beat up to the limit for a whole weekend fulfills her fantasy. For William it is a rush he never expected. |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 29, 2006 |
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not sure what is worse the layout, the flow or the story itself (5/10)
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bisarah
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Mar 12, 2005 |
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i am guessing that you have no clue what constitutes a paragraph. there is a lot of sadistic behavior by the guy and no real understanding why the female allows it. there is a difference between discipline and beating up someone. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Ruby
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Mar 12, 2005 |
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Editing and proof reading would help. The use of words like "scar" might or might not be correct, but one doesn't scar in minutes. Bruise, yes. Scar, no. Shorter paragraphs and more line breaks/empty lines would ease the strain on the eyes. The story is in need of an introduction and motivation. It would also help if the description of actions was augmented by emotion from our sadistic narrator. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Mar 7, 2005 |
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The story is heavy on sadism and pain but not much else. The pleasurable aspects of the experience for either sub or Master aren't explored very well. The writing is better than some seen here but still could benefit from a good editing and or proof reading. (6/10)
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