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The Sacrifice
Author: Michelle Byssom
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(Added on Nov 14, 2004)
(This month 54105 readers) (Total 67132 readers) |
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A young married English woman participates as the willing victim in an ancient Hindu human sacrifice. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
sulkon
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Jun 1, 2012 |
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Sensual and dreamy, requires more involvement from a reader than average stories.
(8/10)
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kaleun76
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Apr 6, 2005 |
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Short and steamy.
The snuff itself was not exactly my style, but the story is still very good. (9/10)
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Ruby
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Nov 27, 2004 |
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I enjoyed everything except the ending. What was Sally's reward? A question that I'm sure could be debated on a number of philosophical levels. (8/10)
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zrob7
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Nov 15, 2004 |
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Very well written short story that combines eroticism, suspense, and sacrificial death.
Very efficient writing that packs a lot into a small space.
I enjoyed it very much....thanks
(9/10)
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| Reviewer:
longrover
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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A promising story. You started with and excellent premise, but it was hard to understand how she reached the point of decision. There are also some sentences that lack ending periods followed by sentences without initial capitals, and several missing commas. The story is otherwise well written and I am glad I read it. Thanks! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2004)
- Dear Longrover: thank you for your kind words about my story in which as you can see I was trying to break a little out of the mold of those stories which have rationales and also beginnings and ends. Do we need rationales and beginnings and ends I ask or rather do we always need them perhaps we do not always need them and the way the mind works is sometimes as difficult to portray as the Making of Americans. Big kiss, Shelly.
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pangent617
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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Well written, the descriptive narrative added to the story, but the premise screams for more information, What drover her to theis point, was she seduced, did her husband drive her away? I guess it was good and worth reading but more like a table of hoers deurs when I really wamted a whole meal, please write more (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Breannefun
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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I usually enjoy snuff stories, but this one kinda turned my stomach. I almost gave it an eight, but to be totally honest, the descriptions, setting, and mood were so well written that my personal dislike of the ending is immaterial. This story was sensual. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2004)
- Thank you for your appreciation of the sensuality. As other reviewers have pointed out this story is not grounded in a theory of rational behaviour and perhaps in this sense it is not of the genre that one may expect from a pornographic story although I tried hard to give it a unity as a short story. Yours truly, Shelly.
- Replied by:
Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2004)
- I'd be intererested to know if your dislike of the ending is because of the event depicted, or the way it was depicted; and if the latter, what I could have done about it. All help gratefully appreciated!
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Breannefun
(Edit) (Nov 20, 2004)
- I guess the reason I didn't care for the ending was because it moved from being a sexual torture, to one just involving pain and mutilation. In Dolcet inspired stories, almost always any mutilation (like being spitted) is accompanied by a sexual ephihany. The ending of your story was graphic in a way that I lost connection to the sexual intensity that you created all through the beginning.
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Michelle Byssom
(Edit) (Nov 26, 2004)
- Thanks, Breanne. I shall take more care over this kind of transition in the future, although I find personally I can flip quite easily from eroticism to death of a nasty and brutal kind.
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