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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chzwiz007
(Edit) |
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Nov 13, 2011 |
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I was just going to read the first couple of paragraphs, but found myself unable to stop. I like the details (wordiness?). Editing was decent. Wanted to see him turn Adriana into his sex slave instead of having mommy dearest pick one. (9/10)
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Maitre1962
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Nov 16, 2007 |
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Nice story! I wish,there was an continuation! It would be great to see the interaction between the fledgling Dom and the slave his mother picked for him! (9/10)
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Master_chris
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Jan 3, 2006 |
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This is a great story, the type that I have to return to, I do hope that at some point that the author will add a bit more to the story (9/10)
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Eraser
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Nov 7, 2004 |
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outstanding! I loved the story and its NICE to see a story that
*************spoiler**********
that doesn't actually engage in incest. the humliation factor is wonderful, but its very real I loved it. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Oct 1, 2004 |
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Good story and well written. Nice and original, but it did seem to end abruptly. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Sep 23, 2004 |
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Well-written and nicely paced. The biggest
fault that I have with it is that the title
gives away the twist ending to Part 1.
I recommend changing it to, for example, "The
Internet Sex Slave" or something similarly
noncommittal.
Part 2 was sluggish and much too wordy. I cut
one point off my rating. Pick up the pace,
PLEASE. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Sep 21, 2004 |
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I like the concept, it's a bit different than the standard bill of fare for this genre. I'd like it a bit more if it wasn't so wordy. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
feelfree2mailme
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Sep 19, 2004 |
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Very nicely written.
Hope the next parts come soon. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Fetterer
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Sep 18, 2004 |
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The premise is a great idea. Alas, like so many, it takes too long to develop and then not enough time to enjoy it. I think the author has the right stuff and should be encouraged to write more. (7/10)
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aetrus
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Sep 16, 2004 |
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Well written and hot (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
SummerMagic
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Sep 16, 2004 |
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Excellent piece of work, and very topical storyline! I can't add to what mythicat has said except to ask that you produce more of this! (9/10)
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mythicat
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Sep 15, 2004 |
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Love the details! While plentiful, they stay on topic and contribute rather than detract from the story telling. Characters and setting become well-rounded without ever bogging down the reader.
The pace is easy, but not too slow. It allows you to get comfortable with the story while keeping you eager for more. The mood is kept fairly light and enjoyable until the end of this segment, where the author cleverly leaves us hanging right at a crucial turn in the plot.
He definitely wants us to want more...and mission accomplished!
Nothing really keeping this from a "10" that a skilled proofreader/editor couldn't fix.
On a personal note, I'm always happy to come across a well-written piece of web-based erotic fiction that's fiction first, and not just 'wank material'. Job well done. (9/10)
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