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Eliza
Author: patrick linney
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(Added on May 2, 2004)
(This month 9287 readers) (Total 18930 readers) |
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A woman - Eliza - who has suffered terrible injuries comes to a lonely cottage for help. But Eliza and Michael have met before, years ago, over a manuscript. Why has she come to him? What is the secret of their dark pleasures? |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 17, 2009 |
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good begininig hope you continue with it (8/10)
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crickette
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Aug 6, 2005 |
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Good start. I liked the storyline but it seemed to end with an unfinished thought. The characters come across as believable and held my interest. I hope that their is more to follow. (7/10)
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Aprilwine
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May 6, 2004 |
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It certainly had some good elemnts but the story was let down by confusion. Perhaps this short length prohibited the fleshing out this required. (5/10)
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Roamer
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May 5, 2004 |
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Confusing and I almost gave up and had to make an effort to finish it. (5/10)
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cancergirl8
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May 5, 2004 |
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The story line was interesting but very confusing. The author needed to spend more time filling in the blanks. Also, the typos and chunks of story missing and doubled were extremely irritating. If all of that was fixed this would be a good story. (5/10)
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MitchCarson
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May 4, 2004 |
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This one took a couple of paragraphs to reel me in, but then it had me. Excellent mood; good mystery. An excellent job of providing information at a nice pace and in clever ways.
The manner in which the primary character’s thoughts and feelings are expressed is truly superb.
And then there was this letdown. Did I miss something or is something missing? If the former, well no surprise there; but the latter would be a minor tragedy considering how the tale seemed to be unfolding.
(7/10)
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Lawrencetoo
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May 4, 2004 |
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It seemed to have typos, missing sections, and duplicate paragraphs. I would like to read it as the author intended. Too bad there is no e-mail for him/her, as I really liked what I did read. I'll write more when/if the typos and such are corrected. (9/10)
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slvWriting
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May 3, 2004 |
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I really enjoyed this one, so different than most stories found here that it was refreshing to my mind. I sincerely think that not many authors have the gift to write this way and for that I congratulate whoever wrote this, my respects to you.
As for errors, I only found two typos. And a section repeated, like Alex said, that I'm not sure is supposes to be there. But I still chose to rate it with a 10 since it was so good...
Alex, oh, Alex it seems as if we were twin souls, we enjoy the same things :-) (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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May 3, 2004 |
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Readers looking to read about raw red-hot sex and wanton lust, may be a little disappointed with this one. I think perhaps the author could have, and probably should, have included a little more detail of those prurient nights, however, personally, I really enjoyed this one. Particularly, I like the fact that it flows on so well from the opening paragraph that forms the base for the entire story challenge. (Certainly not all the stories in the competition do this.)
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It has a lovely ‘old world’ feel about it, there’s probably a much better way of saying it, but I just don’t know what it is. I liked that the information is fed to me throughout the story, and how the author achieved such an intimate feel in his or her story telling. I felt as if Michael was talking to me and only me as I read. There are some lovely descriptions and simply brilliant metaphors in this story too. It’s mysterious, menacing, and intriguing! Oh, boy, didn’t this one just have me flicking through my thesaurus for all the right superlatives?
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The only problem I really had was a few odd typos - damn it. And a section repeated, that I’m not sure was suppose to be there. Those just kind of jarred me a little, and had me dilly-dallying between a nine and ten. (10/10)
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