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Adventures of Brooke
Author: Semiater
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(Added on Apr 22, 2004)
(This month 125036 readers) (Total 191922 readers) |
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In difficult economic times various employment opportunties arrise... |
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| Reviewer:
HisKitten1117
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Apr 12, 2015 |
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I had to rub myself twice! Loved it! (10/10)
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rapidron
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Sep 3, 2014 |
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Awesome writing! Well paced, entertaining, and very impressive in how you're drawn into the story and Brooke's perspective. Great realism. Thank you much for such a good read. I hope it's not too much to ask you to please write more on this =]... (10/10)
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Panther007
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Jan 11, 2012 |
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Great story, only hope we get more chapters soon. (9/10)
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jls152
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Jun 27, 2010 |
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See comments/reply to 82. Don't rush to the end. You've got a good story developing. :) (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 24, 2009 |
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Like other reviewers already stated, this story stands out for its realism in the depiction of the surroundings and especially through the well defined character of Brooke.
One of Semiater's better efforts.
JJ (10/10)
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kaori82
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Apr 30, 2007 |
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In my opinion so far you best story. It's high credibility (I liked part one more than two) and the scenario kind of fits my own fantasies.
I would love to read much more of Brooke working at the club, e.g. William Barton first time taking her to the tropical jungle room ... (9/10)
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jls152
(Edit) (Jun 27, 2010)
- I agree with most of '82s comment. Take your time and develope your story. You've got a good thing going. How about when William happens to watch her working one evening, how she spends her money and returns to her apartment and inter acts with some of her neighbors, she happens to meet a decent chap and wants to date him, she obtains a scholarship and negotiates with Nathan to let her out of her contract...working part-time during holidays. Stretch out and enjoy developing your erotic epic. :)
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Pottygirl
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Mar 17, 2006 |
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mmmm A very good and interesting story. I love the realism of feelings and emotions from Brooke.
Looking forward to more. (10/10)
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fragileamazon
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Mar 14, 2006 |
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A deliciously addictive story! I was enthralled from the get go, and extremely wet by the end. Oh, to be brooke... I will definitely look for the continuation of this story. Excellent Job (10/10)
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Foxysake
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Feb 15, 2006 |
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Very good. I love it. It is highly recommmendable, but you left me with a cliff hanger!! Do u plan on continuing this story? (10/10)
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mkemse
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Feb 15, 2006 |
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nice job just like most of yours (9/10)
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ramses
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Aug 29, 2005 |
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Great start. The story has a high credibility, which makes it one of the best. I look forward to the new chapters. (10/10)
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Wmnwholves
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Apr 26, 2004 |
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This is a great beginning for a story. I could close my eyes and see and feel exactly what Brooke was feeling, and the picture you were painting with words. Keep up the good work and hope to see a new chapter soon.
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e.e. norcod
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Apr 26, 2004 |
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Semiater's best story to date! I could go on all day about all the things I liked about this tale but I will confine myself to a few.
First, the author is using words to paint a scene, describing rather than simply telling. Keep it up! If an associate is being caned describe the welts and wheals and how they change with time. Details like hair color, body build, even the shape of a hand lend versimilitude to a story.
Second, keep it elegent! I can't say how enjoyable it is to read a story that is not littered with "bitch", "Whore", "Slut", etc. It is possible to write erotica without being crude. As you have done erotica can be a function of mood and feeling.
Third, make each chapter as self contained as possible. You made a great start with this first chapter which could easily stand on its own. A good chapter should have a clearly defined beginning, middle and end (and a twist if possible). I love good writing.
I could go on all day but business calls. Keep up the good work.
(9/10)
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Xaphan45
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Apr 23, 2004 |
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Looking forward to the rest of Brooke's story and new vocation. I would like nothing better than have her waiting on me at the club, my finger resting on the remote. (10/10)
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misti_chaton
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Apr 22, 2004 |
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i thought this story was really intresting. i sometimes think about stuff like this happening to me and clubs like this and i'm about brooke's age and it seemed real to me. and it left me wanting to read more. (9/10)
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