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Martha and Laura
Author: Chained_Paladin
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(Added on Feb 11, 2008)
(This month 53835 readers) (Total 66586 readers) |
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A bitch and a beauty captured and broken; the one to recieve punishment for her selfish ways, the other to be rewarded as your cherished, grateful slave. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Feb 14, 2008 |
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The story line was a farce, overly simplistic and not particularly well thought out. The technical skills displayed in this tale are lacking signifigantly, as well. On a positive note, I can see that the author was making an honest attempt at writing something with a little more substance than a standard sex tale
**Chained Paladin - come on into the Forums and join the Writers Block. I think you will improve dramatically with a little instruction. (4/10)
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