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South American trouble
Author: rubadub
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(Added on Dec 15, 2005)
(This month 17598 readers) (Total 48470 readers) |
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The story of english journalist Catherine Parker, who is on assigment in South American only to taken prisoner by the new goverement and taken to their new special facility! |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
rilawild
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Dec 31, 2005 |
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The story itself is ok and has some inventive parts, even though it is a familiar premise. However, the spelling and grammar are terrible. You need to proof read, and preferably get someone else to proof read it as well. I do hope that you do this and continue the story (and please revise part 1 to remove as many mistakes as you can). (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Dec 22, 2005 |
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While the story it self was off to a good start, spell check would help it a long (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Dec 22, 2005 |
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Good grief!!! Perhaps a short course in grammar, punctuation, and spelling might be in order for you. (1/10)
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chksng19
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Dec 22, 2005 |
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Improper words, non-existant words, no quotation marks to set off speech from descriptions, and dozens of other concerns make this story difficult to read, nearly impossible to enjoy. Things happen without explanations such as the girl being taken out of solitary after one day instead of three. Why did this happen? No clue in the story.
You need a proof-reader and/or editor to help fix the concerns. (2/10)
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mkemse
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Dec 21, 2005 |
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the typo's i can live with, altho i strongly recommend using spell check on future posting to keep readers wanting more
I will need to see more of the story to really pass judgement on my rating (7/10)
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kemosabe
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Dec 21, 2005 |
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Far too many misused words, like sho for she, were for where, etc. One paragraph had at least 300 words separated only by commas. A tawdry plot that's been used many times before and this tale does nothing to enlighten it. (2/10)
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