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A PonyGirl for life
Author: J. Morris
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(Added on Aug 25, 2012)
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A real horse lover discovers the pain and the pleasure of becoming a real pony girl |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
technology10g
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Dec 17, 2015 |
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Excellent story and very arousing. Can't wait for even more modifications! (9/10)
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Master_chris
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Sep 21, 2012 |
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I had to repeat this as I feel the same
Love this story especially the head shaving and pony preparations. Looking forward to more modifications to the permanent pony girl and finding out more about her night time activities (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Sep 7, 2012 |
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I can see fair potential for this story, but only if the writer actually tries harder to craft it more stylishly. The main issue, besides a major gaffe how to tell a story (I will get to that in a moment)is the overuse of pronouns and proper nouns at the beginning of sentences. That reduced much of the story to a singsong sort of narrative that became quite annoying. There is also the overuse of "..." where a comma would have sufficed. Again, that became irritating. There was also a common misuse of commas where none was necessary. In short, it was grammatically unsound to the point of distraction.
There was also no ambiance. Subsequently, there was no real feel to this tale, as there should have been. That reduced what could have been highly erotic to something only mildly erotic.
To close, I was struck with the notion this story was hurried by an author who wanted to "get to it" and forgot to flesh out the idea.
**For the author - don't just tell us she was miserable or excited. Make the character show it. She has eyes, skin, muscles, etc. I want to see her eyes and the sadness within, feel the roughness of goose flesh as she orgasms, see the spasms in her legs. Give me a visual and not just a litany of things that happened.
H. Dean (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
latexcatsuitguy
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Aug 31, 2012 |
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Love this story especially the head shaving and pony preparations. Looking forward to more modifications to the permanent pony girl and finding out more about her night time activities. (9/10)
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jaket43
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Aug 31, 2012 |
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Great story so far! Very harsh predicaments for the girl, can't wait to see how much pain and pleasure (but mostly pain) she gets from being a pony! (10/10)
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Whipping
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Aug 27, 2012 |
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I really enjoyed this story. It has a nice pace and some originality in the ponygirl-universe.
I hope to soon see a continuation (10/10)
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